I got up early this morning. After breakfast I went to the beach near my home with my friends. We went there by bike. As soon as we got there, we played with the sand and walked on the beach. We also went boating.It was really fantastic. In the afternoon I went to the library and read books there. I also helped my parents make dinner. After dinner I washed the dishes. In the evening I did my homework. Then I surfed the internet. I had a busy and interesting day.
译文:我这天起床早。吃完早饭后我和兄弟姐妹们去了我家附近的海滩。咱们骑自开车去的。咱们一到那里就玩沙子,在海滩走。咱们也划船。很棒。下午我去图书馆看书。我也帮忙父母做晚饭。饭后我洗碗。晚上我做作业,然后上网。我这天很忙也过得很愉快
I got up early this morning. After breakfast I went to the beach near my home with my friends. We went there by bike. As soon as we got there, we played with the sand and walked on the beach. We also went boating.It was really fantastic. In the afternoon I went to the library and read books there. I also helped my parents make dinner. After dinner I washed the dishes. In the evening I did my homework. Then I surfed the internet. I had a busy and interesting day.
译文:我这天起床早。吃完早饭后我和兄弟姐妹们去了我家附近的海滩。咱们骑自开车去的。咱们一到那里就玩沙子,在海滩走。咱们也划船。很棒。下午我去图书馆看书。我也帮忙父母做晚饭。饭后我洗碗。晚上我做作业,然后上网。我这天很忙也过得很愉快
This Chinese New Year ,I had a lot of fun.
On Chinese New Year’s Eve,Then I bought new clothes with myparents.In the evening,I had a big dinner with my family.After dinner,I watched China's Central Spring Festival Gala.
On Chinese New Year’s Day,I stuck couplets.I had a big dinner,Igot some red packets.
I had a good time.
本人名叫赵一嵘。我的大名是我父亲赐给我的。这个名字象征父母对我的希望:“一”是第一的意思,代表父母希望我样样争先;“嵘”形容山势高峻,父母希望我有卓越的才气、品格,要做一个不平凡的男子汉。
哈哈!说实在话,我确实不负父母期望。
首先,我身体棒棒,热爱运动。如果奶奶问妈妈我去干什么了,妈妈指着那个驰骋球场的小人,满目骄傲。我悄悄告诉你们,在学校历届运动会上,我为班级争了许多荣誉。一年级,参加五十米钓鱼比赛,我荣获低年级组第一名;三年级,我参加羽毛球比赛,荣获年级第一名;在四年级运动会中,我分别拿下长跑和短跑两项运动项目冠军。我虽然个子不很高,但老师说我的爆发力和耐力非常棒。我很骄傲,我既为班级争光,也不负父母对我的期望。
我不仅身体棒,我的学习成绩也很优异。
不管大小考试,我的各科成绩都名列前茅,数学和英语每次考试几乎都是满分。我就很奇怪,我的语文成绩很不错,怎么就考不了满分?难道是作文在作怪?每次作文都被扣几分分。我向身为语文老师的姑妈请教,姑妈说作文就是生活,要多体验生活,观察身边的人和事,多思考,就能写出好作文;她还要求我多读书。说什么要读万卷书,还要行万里路,就不怕写不出好文章。嘿嘿,她是老师,我打算按她说的做,我想,不久,我就能写出惊世名篇了。
我虽然是个品学兼优的学生,但也有许多缺点。
上课我不喜欢发言,可能有点胆小,也可能是咱做事低调吧!不能持之以恒也是咱的致命缺点。幼儿园时,我喜欢上画画,老师说我画画天赋高,父母给我报了画画培训班。我参加过绘画比赛,还得过奖,父母把我获奖的画装框挂在卧室,记录了我的辉煌足迹。可后来,我特好动,妈妈总说我有多动症。其实,我在爱上打篮球后,屁股就讨厌凳子了,安静不下来,画画水平下降了许多。另外,马虎也让我后悔了许多次。有次考数学,我把14.4看成144,与满分失之交臂。为此,爸爸讲了弄错一个小数点的诸多危害,我也意识到了马虎的后果很严重,同时,下决心改掉这个坏毛病!现在,我做题可认真了,再也不会犯这种低级错误。
我还有个让父母头疼的缺点——玩游戏。只要玩起游戏,就什么事都不管了。父母训过我许多次,也把我的手机没收了,可我总觉得,玩游戏可以开发智力。也许我的观念是错的,不过,还是适可而止。爸爸经常说:玩过头了,就丧志了。我可不想成为一个没出息的孩子。
我的优点是我的骄傲,也是父母的骄傲,但我的缺点也让父母烦恼。我会努力改掉缺点,争取做一个名副其实的好学生!
This summer vacation I got a part-time job in a snack bar. At the beginning, I couldn't do well at all often made mistakes. I was very low-spirited,father mother encouraged me a lot. So I began to try my best. Gradually, I could do a very good job. I felt very excited when I received my pay for the first time. I already made up my mind to find another part-time job in this winter vacation. I believe I can do better next time.
Directions: For this part, you are allowed thirty minutes to write a composition on the topic Free Admission to Museums. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
1. 越来越多的博物馆免费对外开放的目的是什么?
2. 也会带来一些问题;
3. 你的看法?
点评:
2009年的四级考试作文沿袭了近几年四级作文的特点,即问题解决型+观点对比型的结合。属社会类话题,纵观各个辅导机构的预测作文,没有人预测博物馆的话题。但是就今年的考题形式而言,三个段落的写法在课堂上都讲到了。下面是分析:
按照课堂所讲审题阶段应该关注英文标题和汉语提纲,即:1)Free Admission to Museums 2)汉语提纲3条。从中可知,核心话题是free admission, 从三个方面来探讨这一话题即可。
根据"先结构后表达"的原则安排段落结构即可做到结构清晰:
先结构:
1、段写该现象的目的(其实就是好处);
2、段写问题(即负面影响);
3、段写看法(或解决措施)
后表达:
确定好各段结构之后,利用3分钟时间联想各部分可以选用的句式和词汇表达,并以关键词的形式列出以帮助自己理顺写作的思维。
写作完成之后,检查。
下面为用课堂所讲套路写的简易版本,供大家参考。
Free Admission to Museums
首段
版本1:In recent years, an increasing number of museums become free to the public. (或:It can be noticed that ...)There are several aims for this phenomenon, but the following may be the most critical. Free admission enables people, especially students, to have more opportunities to visit museums, where they can acquire knowledge of history, arts, customs and so forth.
版本2: According to a recent survey by China Daily, about 84.3% of museums become free to the public. By doing so, museums attract millions of people to visit every day. In addition, the visitors, especially students, broaden their horizons and enlarge their scope of knowledge.
中间段:
There are, however, several negative effects which we can not turn a blind eye to. Firstly, owing to free admission, a large number of visitors will visit museums. Consequently, the museum may become too crowded. Even worse, free admission may result in some financial problems. For instance, museum workers can hardly get enough salary. Last but not least, the preservation of cultural heritage may be impaired.
尾段:
版本1:(课堂讲过的) Personally, I am convinced that free admission to museum is a two-edged sword, which presents us both advantages and troubles. The best policy, as I see it, is to maximize the benefits and minimize the negative influences.
版本2:From my point of view, it is high time that we took measures to eliminate the negative impacts. Firstly, regulations should be worked out to limit the number of visitors to museum every day. Secondly, it is advisable for government to offer financial assistance to museums. Only in this way can museums provide service to public in a better way.
This story is called "The Farmer and the Snake." Every day, a farmer went to the city to sell his flowers and farm produce and then went home after selling all his things. One day, he left home very early, so early that when he arrived at the city, the gate was still closed. So he lay down to take a nap, when he awoke he found that the storage bin containing his farm produce had become empty except that there was a gold coin inside. Although all the things in the bin had vanished, the gold was much more valuable so he was still very happy. He thought most probably someone had taken his things and left the payment there, and went home happily with the money.
这个故事叫做农夫和蛇。有一个农夫,每天到城里去卖他自己种的花和农产品,卖完以后就回家。有一天,他很早出门,来到城门时,因为还太早,城门还没开,所以他就先躺在那边睡觉。当他醒过来时,看到他装农产品的瓶子都空空了,里面多了一块黄金的钱。虽然瓶子里的东西不见了,不过那块黄金的钱已经很多了,所以他还是非常高兴。他想大概有人拿走他的东西,然后放钱在那边,于是就快乐地带着钱回家了。
The next day, the farmer again went out to sell his things but again arrived too early so he slept outside the city gate just like he had done the day before. And the incident repeated itself. All the produce that the farmer had brought disappeared, and there was a gold coin in the bin! At that time, gold was very valuable. One gold coin had a value many times higher than the farmer's produce.
隔天,农夫又出门去做买卖,同样也是来得太早,所以他又在城门那边睡觉。结果又发生一样的事情,农夫带来的东西都不见了,瓶子里面又多了一块黄金的钱!那时候黄金是很有价值,所以一块黄金的钱比农夫的农产品还高出好几倍的价值。
Then one day some time later, the farmer's father asked him, "Where have you gotten so many gold coins lately? Where did the money come from?" So the farmer revealed to his father what had happened. After listening to his story, the father thought, "One day I'll follow my son as he goes out, and see who's been consuming his things and leaving the money in the bin."
后来有一天,农夫的父亲问他:最近你怎么忽然间得到那么多黄金的钱?那些钱是从哪里来的?农夫就把他遇到的事情告诉他的父亲。他的父亲听了以后,心想:我要找一天跟着我的儿子出门,看看到底是谁吃他的东西,然后把钱放在他的瓶子里面。
So one day, when the farmer went out to do business, his father quietly followed him. While the farmer was sleeping near the city gate, his father saw a snake crawl up to his bin and eat his produce. Having finished eating, the snake once again spat a gold coin into the bin as payment to the farmer before leaving. Seeing this, the farmer's father thought, "If I kill the snake, I'll be able to seize all its gold coins!" He then picked up a stone and cut the snake into two parts.
有一天农夫出去做买卖时,他的父亲就默默跟着他。当农夫在城门附近睡觉的时候,他的父亲看到一条蛇爬到他的瓶子那边吃他的东西,吃完以后,就吐出一块黄金的钱到瓶里面,算是付钱给他这样子,然后蛇就爬走了。农夫的父亲想:「如果我把这条蛇杀掉,就可以得到它全部黄金的钱了9于是他找了一块石头,把那条蛇割成两段。
At that time, the head and trunk of the snake were already in its den, and only the tail was outside. The father thought that there must be a big treasure in the den so he told his son to reach inside for it. But unexpectedly, when the farmer reached his hand into the den, the snake bit and killed him! Even though it had been cut into two, the snake could still bite! I understand how this could have happened because that was how I got bitten when I was small. At that time, I saw a centipede that had been beaten and squashed by someone, leaving only the head intact. I thought it was dead, and to make sure, I poked it with my foot. It bit me hard and I cried for three days. (Laughter) I was really dumb! Remember! Don't play with a centipede even if it looks dead. Sometimes it just fakes death; it's not really dead.
那时候,那条蛇的头部和身体已经爬进它的窝里面,只剩下尾巴露在外面。农夫的父亲认为蛇窝里面有很多宝藏,就叫农夫伸手去拿。没想到当农夫把手伸进去时,却被蛇咬死了!被割成两段的蛇竟然还可以咬人啊!这种情形我知道,我小的时候也曾经被这样咬过。那时候我看到一只蜈蚣被人家打扁了,只剩下头还没扁,我认为它已经死了。为了要确定看看它是不是真的死了,我就用脚去拨看看,结果被咬了一口,哭了三天(大家笑),太笨了!你们要记得,看到蜈蚣不应该玩,即使它已经死了,也不要跟它玩,因为有时候它只是装死而已,还没有真的死。
Perhaps that was what happened to the snake in the story. Its head wasn't dead yet. Thus, it bit the farmer, who subsequently died. Seeing his son killed, the farmer's father cried brokenheartedly next to the son's dead body and asked the snake, "You snake! Why did you kill my son? Why did you bite my son and kill him?" Instead of answering him, the snake asked, "Why did you break my back with the stone? There was no animosity between us. I had never done anything bad to you, nor had I done you any harm. If you had been more patient and waited, I would have given the entire treasure here to you. However, because you struck me, I bit and killed your son. Had I killed you instead, you would not be in such deep sorrow. I killed your son so that you'd live the rest of your life in agony." This snake was venomously wise! Instead of biting the man who tried to kill it, it bit his son so that the father would be in agony for the rest of his life. It was truly amazing!
故事中的这条蛇大概也是一样的情形,它的头还没死,所以咬了农夫一口,结果他就死掉了。农夫的父亲看到自己小孩的尸体躺在那边,哭得很伤心。然后他问蛇说:蛇啊,你为什么要杀我的儿子?为什么要把我的儿子咬死呢?那条蛇就反问他:那你为什么用石头打断我的背呢?我们之间又没有什么仇恨,我从来没有对你做过什么坏事,也不曾伤害过你,如果你有耐心一点,慢慢来,我里面的宝藏都会给你。不过,因为你打我,所以我才把你的小孩咬死。如果我把你咬死的话,你就不会那么伤心,所以我把你的小孩咬死,让你整个辈子很痛苦。蛇的智慧真的很毒啊!它不咬那个杀牠它的人,而咬他的儿子,让他痛苦整个辈子。好厉害!